1001+Flat+Tales

**Siblings: 3 older brothers David, Anthony and Tom **
 * **Hi, my name is Alyssa;) **
 * Grade: 8th **
 * Best Holiday: christmas **
 * Birth Month: June **
 * Career Goals: to be an athlete ** or teacher
 * Favorite Band(s): T.I. Paula DeAnda Ne-yo and more!!!! **
 * Favorite Food: italian **
 * Favorite Munchies: strawberries **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Favorite soft drink: dr pepper **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Favorite Subject: math **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Pet Peeve: when people's socks show **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Pets: puppy=P Tigger<3 **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive; color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">

**<span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">The Dream **<span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">


 * <span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">Lily has super powers and she is the only one who knows, except her best friend. Her family does not even know. She can fly, rewind time, freeze time, super speed and super strength. Today in science class, Mrs. Lopez assigned partners and Lilly was paired up with Justin. They had to make a model of the human stomach. Lily was upset that her and Nicole were not partners and that she and Justin were partners. Friday came and Justin and Lily made plans to meet up after school and go to a museum that showed a model of the human stomach. Then after they went to the museum Lily went to Justin’s house to work on their project. They had a lot of laughs and finished half of the project, then Lily was running late and she had to go home so her dad didn’t yell at her so she left Justin’s house and used her flying power to get home. She then called Nicole and told her that they had been totally misjudging Justin and told her that she kind of liked him and Nicole was mad because she likes Justin to, but was afraid to tell Lily. Nicole told Lily that she liked him for a month and Lily was mad that she didn’t tell her because they are best friends and they are suppose to tell each other everything. **<span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">
 * <span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">A week had past and Nicole and Lily still were not speaking and Lily had to go over Justin’s to finish the project since it was due in three days. Then when they were done the project fell and broke. Lily said “It’s okay, I will fix it,” and Justin asked “How it is destroyed?” and she said “Watch this!” Lily used her rewind time power and the project was fixed and she moved it so that it wouldn’t fall. Justin was in shock. He said “Oh my gosh how did you do that?” she said “I have super powers, but you have to promise that you won’t tell anyone Justin.” He said “Alright I promise i will not tell anyone.” She said “thank you” and he said “no problem.” Justin leaned in to kiss her, her phone rang. It was her dad, he asked her where she was because she had 5 minutes to get home. She lied and told him she was on her way. She immdeantly ran out the door and thanked Justin’s mom. She used her speed to get home. She made it just in time. She had butterflies in her stomach and she skipped dinner and went straight to her room. She called up Nicole and apologized for getting mad at her and told her to come over because she had good news. Nicole arrived at 7:00 pm. They hugged and said they were sorry. Then Lily told her what happened with her and Justin and Nicole wasn’t mad, she was happy for her friend. **<span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">
 * <span style="color: rgb(47, 255, 0); background-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive;">The night was over and it was time for Lily to wake up for school. For once in her life Lily was happy to go to school. In science she sat next to Justin and they presented their project. After school Justin and Lily hung out again. Justin asked her who else knew about her powers and she said just him and Nicole. He was shocked she didn’t tell her family, but got over that topic and just talked. On Friday they all went bowling. When it was over Lily flew Justin home. Justin kissed Lily and then said by. Lily went home and her mom noticed that she was smiling and laughing more than she used to. She asked her what was wrong, Lily said nothing and lied to her mom. Lily never tells her mom the truth, she is constantly lying. When Lily went to bed that night, she was thinking about telling her family the truth about her powers. In the morning, Lily told her mom. Her mom didn’t believe her Lily decided to prove it to her mom. Her powers were not working at all. She was getting mad, then all of a sudden she kept hearing Lily Lily Lily wake up. It turns out Lily fell asleep durring science class. Everything she dreamed was not true at all. She didn’t have super powers and she did not kiss Justin. Lily wished that it was true, but her teacher screamed at her and she was sent to the principals office. She got a detention and when she got home she was grounded for the weekend. Lily wished that everything she had dreamed was true, but unfortunatley it wasn’t. **

Questions for Peer Reviewers || <span style="line-height: 115%; font-size: 14pt; color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Alyssa editor: Bobbi<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">:)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="line-height: 115%; font-size: 16pt; color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">It’s original, but maybe you should go into more detail about the ending. I liked the story and the ending but little more detail.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="line-height: 115%; font-size: 16pt; color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">I’m not quite sure what the problem was or the solution so, I don’t really know how to give you feed back sorry.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="line-height: 115%; font-size: 16pt; color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">I think you did a great job on your character’s I think you described the relationship between the character’s well.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255); font-size: 16pt; line-height: 115%;">Yes, I could imagine the story but, you could be in more detail about her powers.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="font-size: 154%; color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">There are some spelling mistakes.